When I look at the content, here’s a few pointers:
1. It takes too long to get into things
2. “My students” sounds too salesy; make sure the viewer feels like you are here to give rather than pull another sales
3. Remove your logoscreen
4. You get straight into the content, but it’d be beneficial to also outline the general structure of the video so the viewer knows what they’re getting into
5. Your first tip felt too predictable; which will affect the willingness for viewers to watch longer