Your messaging is *extra* and not in the good way.
The situation looks like this:
1) We need to solve [PROBLEM]
2) If [NONDESCRIPT AUDIENCE] knew [LONG CONVOLUTED STRING OF MESSAGES] our problem would be solved
3) Let's try to tell them [3-5 MESSAGES] all at once
This approach does not work. Your fledgling startup's ICP should be well defined, and even then, they can *barely* grok the one message. You will have to choose, and it will be hard.
Once you absolutely hammer that message a million ways, in a million places, only then can you move down the list to Message No. 2.
This is the problem with messaging that's designed by committee. Everyone has their own pet version of the messaging that they want to shoehorn in and it becomes easier over time to just sigh and acquiesce. It quickly devolves into alphabet soup. Lots of letters, low on meaning.
Resist this impulse if you can. You can do it all, but not all at the same time.